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As we are facing more and more problems, which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, The world has suffered from a lot of problems like environmental issues, terrorism, poverty, disease etc. At that time the good bond with other countries are becoming more important than ever before. I completely agree with
this
 point.
Firstly
, the good relationships with the different countries which become a profit on the import and export market. If both the countries agree on
this
, it will affect the many things which can buy from outside the country.
This
 will be profiting from both the side of views like coffee, vegetables, oil and many more.
Secondly
, From the good relationship with countries, they build their several branches of the brand for another country to make their profit.
Moreover
, the sectors like jewellery, clothes, electronic sector, automobile sector are open to attract many people for their enjoyment and status too. Recently. "KIA" which is a Korean company launches those cars in India and suddenly the market of these car's gonna high in India and
this
 affect the profit for them.
Also
, from that the employment rate increases.
Furthermore
,
This
 relationship will highly impact on the environment issues like flood, cyclone, bush fires etc. These all are natural disaster and from these sometimes very dangerous
effect
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effects
 for the country. Recently, while Australia was surrounded by fire in the jungle. Approximately, around 40-50 percentage of land was covered by
this
 disaster and so many animals have lost their lives.
Therefore
, The India, UK, US and other countries help them to reunite their nation again. To conclude, these some issues like poverty, environmental issues, employment and so on are manageable if the
countrie's
Suggestion
countries'
countries
counties
 relations are good. I am totally agree with
this
 statement that the at the present time relationship among countries is more important than ever before. I agree with
this
.

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