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Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil, natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, are encouraged. Is this trend a positive or a negative development?

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It is irrefutable that fossil fuels are the main source of
energy
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 in many parts of the world, but renewable sources of
energy
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 like solar power are getting popularised at an unprecedented rate in some nations. In my opinion, I fully convinced that developing the
alternative
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 sources of
energy
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 is positive mainly because of its renewable and e
nvironmental-
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environment
environmentally
friendly features.
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 with, It is widely acknowledged that renewable resources
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 as solar
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 and wind
energy
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 is an everlasting source of power and can
thus
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 be used repetitively.
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, non-renewable resource like fossil fuels can be only used once. Under
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 circumstance, people are l
ikely to lack of
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likely to lack
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 resources because of excessive
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.
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, the local government should encourage people to
use
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alternative
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 sources of
energy
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instead
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 of fossil fuels.
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,
instead
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 of producing poisonous gas into a
ir,
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the air
alternative
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 resources fully make
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 of natural resources to generate
energy
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 without exhaust emission.
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, the national electricity is generated by wind
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, which totally does not contaminate the environment.
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 the
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 of these
alternative
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 sources has some hurdles
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 as the initial cost of setting up solar panels and wind farms is very high, and these are
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 dependent on the geographical location.
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, once the initial cost has been met with, their maintenance is practically negligible. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the
use
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 of the potential
energy
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 sources to replace conventional
energy
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 is obviously an important step forward.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • inexhaustible
  • pollution
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • finite resources
  • boom-and-bust cycles
  • national security
  • dependence
  • politically unstable regions
  • infrastructure
  • intermittency
  • energy storage solutions
  • potential
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