You are moving to a new country ,write a letter to the accommodation agency to rent a house In your letter describe Yourself and your family Which area you would like to live in And what facilities you need in the house.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to enquire about, a house for rent. As

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I have been personally recommended by a friend about your superior quality service.

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, I would request

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you to

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suggest a house for me, as per the requirement stated below. I am a young doctor, who will be immigrating along with my wife in the

first

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week of July 2020. As, I will be practising in

Healthcare

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a Healthcare

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hospital, Carlton

road

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, Toronto. It would be preferred if the house is near to the hospital.

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, I have a

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of features that the apartment should have.

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fully-furnished

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fully furnished

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, as

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will be new to the place and look to quickly settle in. Another is

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one bedroom on

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the 10th

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floor or above with

north facing

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window.

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, I am open to suggestions.

Hope

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, you will get back with the best match

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a reasonable price. Please feel free to contact me on the mobile number given below.

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Yours

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Your

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faithfully, Abhishek Agrawal

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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164 words

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