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SHOULD GOVERNMENT REGULATE THE FAST FOOD INDUSTRIES IN THE SAME WAY THAT REGULATES THE DRUG, ALCOHOL AND TOBACCO INDUSTRIES

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In
this
 day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on whether government ban the fast
food
 like the same way as the
drug
,
alcohol
 and
tobacco
 industries or not. I myself believe that the government should not harshly prevent the fast
food
 as same as the
drug
,
alcohol
 and
tobacco
 industries. It is clear that fast
food
 has an important role play in human life as well as the benefits of fast for the sociable purposes.
Firstly
, eating fast
food
 is absolutely convenient, especially in terms of the people do not have time to cook and prepare. To be more specific, the fast
food
 is immensely appealing in favour of the diversity of these industries, which makes many people easily choose their own favourite meal as well as the unnecessary time-consuming to cook.
Therefore
, those people do not have time and always bombard with a large of jobs that results in they can balance their works and the adequate nutrients for their health. Despite the drawbacks of fast
food
 sometimes indirectly effect on some aspects of life, but fast
food
 are not really dangerous like the
drug
,
alcohol
 and
tobacco
 impact on social. To be more clear, abuse of amount of fast
food
 in the long period that leads to some diseases
such
 as obesity, especially in the teenagers and offsprings generation.
In contrast
, the adverse devastating effects of using the
drug
,
alcohol
 and
tobacco
 that result in many people can not aware of their behaviours that lead to crime, violence, addiction. In conclusion, I believe that it is more beneficial for the government to adjust the laws to manage the fast
food
 markets in the less strict ways than the
drug
,
alcohol
, and
tobacco
 industries.
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