You wish to get enrolled in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information, but you haven’t received a reply yet. Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in less than two months. You need to know if you can still get enrolled, you also request more information about the course, including the cost.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

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letter to express my concern related to my enrollment in the

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in Business Accountancy. As I have not received any answer to my previous mail that I sent you 2 weeks ago, asking for the details of the subjects and college. I am a little worried now because the semester is going to start in the next 2 months before June. I have not applied to another college yet because Box Hill College, Australia is my dream destination.

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, I was waiting for your reply. I want to know if you still have any vacancies in my required

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for the upcoming semester. I

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require some more detailed information in relation to

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course

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, like the total number of days that I need to attend the classes, the exact date when the

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begins, and the subjects that I have to study including the total amount of fees that I need to submit per semester.

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, I have to deposit the cost of my first two semesters only. I will be waiting for a positive reply. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.

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coherence cohesion

You've effectively communicated your concerns and requests, maintaining a clear and relevant structure throughout your letter.

task achievement

It would enhance clarity and impact by adding more specific details about your previous attempts to contact the college and specifying any particular areas of the course you're most interested in.

logical structure

Your letter is well-organized, making it easy to follow your line of reasoning and requests.

suitable writing tone

You have maintained a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

188 words

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Course details
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