You wish to get enrolled in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information, but you haven’t received a reply yet. Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in less than two months. You need to know if you can still get enrolled, you also request more information about the course, including the cost.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my concern related to my enrollment in the
course
in Business Accountancy. As I have not received any answer to my previous mail that I sent you 2 weeks ago, asking for the details of the subjects and college. I am a little worried now because the semester is going to start in the next 2 months before June. I have not applied to another college yet because Box Hill College, Australia is my dream destination.
Thus
, I was waiting for your reply. I want to know if you still have any vacancies in my required
course
for the upcoming semester. I
also
require some more detailed information in relation to
this
course
, like the total number of days that I need to attend the classes, the exact date when the
course
begins, and the subjects that I have to study including the total amount of fees that I need to submit per semester.
Initially
, I have to deposit the cost of my first two semesters only. I will be waiting for a positive reply. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
You've effectively communicated your concerns and requests, maintaining a clear and relevant structure throughout your letter.
task achievement
It would enhance clarity and impact by adding more specific details about your previous attempts to contact the college and specifying any particular areas of the course you're most interested in.
logical structure
Your letter is well-organized, making it easy to follow your line of reasoning and requests.
suitable writing tone
You have maintained a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.
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