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All cars that burn fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuel
All vehicles that
uses
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use
 fuels must should be forbidden and must replace with electric cars. I strongly agree with the statement because harmful gases released by cars can cause air pollution.
Moreover
, electricity is a renewable
energy
, while
fuel
 is non-renewable
energy
. The gases emitted primarily from vehicles are very harmful. It causes air
pollution which
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pollution, which
 is inhaled by almost all living creatures. It is very dangerous for health, resulting in so many diseases. Another reason is that gasoline and carbon-dioxide released by vehicles can have
direct impact
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a direct impact
 on climate change and ozone layer depletion. It usually happens in mega cities like Delhi, where there are lots of vehicles. Electricity is a renewable
energy
. Electric cars are
environmental
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environmentally
 friendly and is a renewable
energy
 unlike the vehicles which depends on fuels. Fossil fuels
takes
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take
 millions of years to form the actual
fuel
 and is not easily replaceable. Since wind, sun and hydro powers are inexhaustible and easily replaceable, electric cars are more convenient than fossil
fuel
 cars or vehicles. Electric cars are available only in most advanced countries like Japan. To conclude, I must say that every
vehicles
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vehicle
 which uses fuels must replace by electric cars. Electric cars
does not pollute
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do not pollute
air
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the air
, whereas
fuel
 used cars does. Fossil fuels are non-renewable and cannot be renewed once it exhausts.
In-case
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Incase
 of electrical
energy
, it is renewable and easily re-place able. In the nutshell, electric cars are far better than
fuel
 used cars and
fuel
 used cars must be replaced by electric cars.

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