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Many people think it is important to spend a lot of money on a large wedding celebration. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion and give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience

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Wedding is
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 of the major events where people spend exorbitantly. While many individuals think that these spendings are justified, others oppose the idea.
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 essay will juxtapose on both these views, and will
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 conclude with my opinion. Most of the wealthy people believe that weddings are the place to show
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's affluence.
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, they find it indispensable to invest a hefty
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 of
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 in
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 celebrations.
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, Mukesh Ambani,
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 of the billionaires in India spent almost a thousand crore rupees in his daughter's marriage.
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, some people are obligated to spend a lot in these ceremonies due to the
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 of the society. A recent research done in India found that an average middle class man spend almost double the
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 of his net worth during
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 ceremonies because of the
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 from the relatives and social groups.
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, the new trend among the youth has been started to keep these celebrations as simple as possible. Rather, they prefer spending
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 humongous
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 on their future by investing in some property or starting a new business.
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 people see it as a waste of
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, energy and time.
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,
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 release the
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 from the person who is burdened to put his hard earned
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 on big weddings.
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, some people
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 think that through simple weddings, we are not responsible for any
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 expectations of others.
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 means that if a person spends plethora of
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 in
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 function, he would be expected to maintain that trend in the future as well. In conclusion, some people think that it is mandatory to spend a hefty
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 of
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 during wedding celebrations to show off your social status and capacity to spend a big
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.
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, some people believe in simplicity and think these spendings a waste and think that it is wise to invest
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money
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 for a bright future and I completely agree with them as
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 releases any kind of social
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 on people who have to invest in
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 ceremonies.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagant
  • lavish
  • grand
  • celebrate
  • create memories
  • social status
  • status symbol
  • impress
  • traditional
  • unique
  • intimate
  • meaningful
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • focus on
  • materialistic
  • practical
  • simple
  • modest
  • affordable
  • cost-effective
  • waste of money
  • personal choice
  • memorable
  • special
  • exchange vows
  • union of two souls
  • bonding of families
  • express love
  • have a great time
  • involve
  • guests
  • family members
  • close friends
  • procession
  • festivities
  • entertainment
  • food and drinks
  • music
  • photography
  • venue
  • décor
  • wedding attire
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