People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that people had a
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life compared to nowadays.
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it is a commonly held belief that people who lived in previous times had a better quality of life than those today, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that living nowadays is easier because we have everything more advanced.
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with, these advances make our lives better because we have the latest versions of many things,
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as mobile phones and modern methods of learning.
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, nowadays, if we have any questions, we can ask artificial intelligence and receive answers immediately.
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, we depend on artificial intelligence in several aspects of our lives.
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, if we need to search for information, it only takes a few minutes,
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previously we needed to look for the right textbook and search through many references. Another point to consider is that in every century, life becomes easier
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advancements that help humans. It is
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possible to say that engineers develop new inventions every day, which help reduce diseases and physical effort.
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, nowadays cars provide individuals with a high level of comfort; they are almost like homes with wheels. There are even vans equipped with beds, toilets, and kitchens.
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, several studies have shown that the new generation is happier than previous ones. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that engineers have improved our lives by developing useful technologies, and each person has a duty to contribute.

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Make your main answer more clear in the first paragraph. At first, you say life was better before, but later you say life is easier now. This gives a mixed view.
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Answer the question more directly. You should clearly say how much you agree or disagree and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Use more specific examples. Your ideas are relevant, but some examples are general, like AI and cars. Add one real and clear example for each main point.
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Your essay has a clear basic structure: introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion. This is good.
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Linking words are used well in many places, such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'Moreover'. But do not use too many fixed phrases.
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Some sentences do not connect smoothly. Make sure each body paragraph has one main idea and all sentences support it.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
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Your ideas are easy to follow in general, and the essay moves in a logical way.
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You use examples to support your points, which helps your answer.
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