The diagram below shows the number of landline telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period.

The diagram below shows the number of landline telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period.
The bar chart illustrates the oil
production
of
OPEC
and
non-
OPEC
countries over 40
years
. The
production
of oil drastically increased from 11
million
between 1980-2000 to its highest of 19
million
barrels per day in the first decade of the 21st century.
However
, The
production
reduced slightly by about 1
million
barrels per day over the
next
10
years
.
Also
, the
production
saw a steep shift from
Non-
OPEC
dominance in the
last
decade of the 20th century to
the
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OPEC
dominance in the first 20
years
of the 21st century of which the Middle East was the largest producer. The total amount produced by
OPEC
countries was only 3
million
coming from the Middle East in the period between 1980 - 2000 in comparison to
non-
OPEC
with 8
million
barrels.
However
, the numbers changed significantly over the
next
20
years
with
OPEC
countries producing 13
million
and
non-
OPEC
producing only 5
million
in the first 10
years
and
OPEC
producing 18
million
and
non-
OPEC
only producing 2
million
in the
next
decade. In conclusion,
Overall
oil
production
saw a steep increase from the 1980s to the early 2000s post which it stabilized.

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