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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as the main source of income.unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if not managed properly. do you think the benefits of tourism outweigh its disdvantages

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International travelling has become very common worldwide and
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 has become a major source of revenue for some countries but according to some people it can cause problems if not dealt with adequately. In my opinion,
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 has many benefits like economic development of the
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 compared to any disadvantages it might bring. Despite the drawbacks mentioned below,
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 has many benefits like the economic development of a
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. When the foreigners from several different countries visit a place, they bring revenue with them. It provides local people with a lot of job opportunities like the tour guides, hotel business flourishes with booking of extra number of rooms and the earning of restaurants quadruples as the tourists take an interest in local cuisines.
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 it helps to spread the culture and traditions of a
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 internationally.
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 may help in a number of ways to improve the international
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 of a
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, ever since, Pakistan has opened its door for international
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,
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 of the state has changed into peace loving and noble
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 is of crucial importance in the era when a fierce neighbour is trying to tarnish the
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 of our
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 in international politics,
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,
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 is the solutions to send a soft
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 to the world. Admittedly, there are a few drawbacks of
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 related to the places which have a maximum influx of traveller during a particular season.
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, the northern areas of Pakistan receive maximum tourists in summer, in other seasons the areas become inaccessible. The local people may lose interest in agriculture and farming as it requires more energy compared to working as a tour guide so it may lead to decrease in crop production.
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, the towns and cities may become overcrowded with tourist, especially during vacations and may interfere with daily activities of local people. In conclusion, the benefits of
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 far outweigh the few minor drawbacks which can easily be managed if government takes adequate measures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • stimulates the local economy
  • cultural understanding
  • global awareness
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental degradation
  • habitat destruction
  • resource depletion
  • cultural erosion
  • foreign influences
  • overcrowding
  • quality of life
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