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With the development of media online, there is no future for the radio. To what extend do you agree?

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Media online has become increasingly popular these days. While some people believe that
radio
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 might disappear soon,
this
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 essay disagrees that it would remain functional in the future as would be discussed here. On the one hand,
although
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 media online is developing rapidly around the world, people living in
rural area
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rural areas
a rural area
 may still struggle to access
internet
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coverage
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. Media online can only be used if it reaches a particular domain where the
internet
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 signal could reach.
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,
internet
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 accessibility might not be always available, especially when bad weather occurs.
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,
radio
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 might remain its function to broadcast information to its audience because it does not depend on the
internet
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coverage
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 for broadcasting even though when bad weather or natural disaster occur.
This
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 can be exemplified by the fact that in an area where tsunami takes place, it might force an electrical authority to cut down its installation on
housing complex
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the housing complex
a housing complex
 to avoid another accident like fire due to electrical fault and
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, if the electricity is down, the
internet
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coverage
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 is hardly accessible.
On the other hand
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, as
radio
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 invented
in previous era
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in a previous era
 where the
internet
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 has not been even invented, it becomes the main device for broadcasting function to its audience. Some countries even rely on it when it comes to broadcasting official news.
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, they preserve its function until
now despite
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now, despite
 the development of the
internet
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.
In addition
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, some
radio
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stations whether
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stations, whether
 belong to
government
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the government
 or even private company took revolutionary actions by adopting functional feature into more advanced technology to adapt in
this
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 digital era as we can see from the BBC
radio
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 station whose website looks futuristic and provide some subtitles for its podcast. They took necessary adjustments to satisfy their audience. To sum up,
although
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 the
internet
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 is developing expansively and almost covers most
area
Suggestion
areas
 in the world, there exist some issues regarding its signal
coverage
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.
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,
radio
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 could cover almost all places around the world even in emergency period.
Thus
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, it is evident that there will always be future for
radio
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media consumption
  • diversifies
  • live streaming
  • podcasts
  • extinction
  • emergency broadcasting
  • accessibility
  • affordability
  • nostalgic
  • cultural significance
  • adaptability
  • relevance
  • community building
  • local news dissemination
  • emerging artists
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