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Television as powerful educational tool or mindless entertainment ? What extent do you agree or disagree ?

#television #tool #entertainment
Character
education
 is an umbrella term loosely used to describe the teaching of children, teenagers and adults in a manner that will help them develop variously as moral, civic, good, mannered, behaved, non-bullying, healthy, critical, successful, traditional, compliant or socially acceptable beings. Nowadays,
character
education
 is very important in our life. Especially for teenagers who have unstable hormones. The
first
 reason why
character
education
 is so important for teenage life is,
character
education
 can educate them to do the right things. Usually, teenagers make a decision through their mood and their feelings. As we know, at their
age they can’t
Suggestion
age, they can’t
 usually control their emotions, so it will affect them to choose what good or bad for themselves. With
character
education
, teenagers probably think about cause and effect for what they choose, so it helps them to choose something wisely

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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