In many countries there is a shortage of suitable people for essential jobs. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it !

Many countries have a staff shortage in medicine and other fields requiring a great deal of training. At the same term, there may be a lack of unskilled and semi-skilled workers, like cleaners or drivers. The gap in skilled professions is partly
due to
time and money: the training for a nurse e or doctor takes several years and is very expensive. These are features that do not bode well for
people
coming from the developing world, since interests in
this
part of the world,
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benefits, rather than the long wait that ensues after enrolling in protracted and extended courses. Future needs cannot be predicted very accurately, so it is hard to ensure that enough
people
are trained. Many individuals and countries simply cannot afford the training. Some governments have tackled that problem by determining what subjects students should study.
This
ensures that enough lawyers, teachers and so on are trained. One drawback,
however
, is that it ignores the differences in
people
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motivation and aptitude and may mean that
people
will have to settle for Jobs that they are just not made
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for example
, someone who might have been an excellent dentist has become a mediocre accountant
instead
. A shortage may
also
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in the cost of living in my country, only a handful of the public sector employees,
such
as police officers, can afford accommodation in the more affluent regions, resulting in ever-increasing staff shortages in those areas. The problem can be alleviated, though only to a limited extent, by subsidizing housing for certain workers. As the level of education rises, fewer
people
are willing to take on menial work. The unpleasantness of
such
work could be recognized through higher wages,
although
this
would require a transformation of the
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economy,
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whole.
To conclude
, shortages are probably inevitable,
although
fields and geographical areas where they occur are likely to change from time to time

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