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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Analyze both sides of this argument.

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In today’s world, the use of
technology
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 is ever-increasing. Even in classrooms
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 can be commonly seen. The
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 that
technology
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 will completely replace the
teacher
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 in the
classroom
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 is a subject
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both
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 supported and refuted by many.
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 sides of
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argument
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 will be analyzed before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
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 it is easy to see the progressive rate at which
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 is able to mimic
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 the physical and mental abilities of human beings.
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, the Honda robot Asimov can today move its body and manipulate objects with human-like precision.
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 the possibility of robotic teachers in the future truly becomes a plausible outcome given time. Because of
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 it is easy to see why the
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 that
technology
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 could replace human teachers in the
classroom
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 has garnered support.
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 on the other side of
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argument
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 it must be remembered that a
teacher
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 powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students.
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, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a
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 to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during class time.
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 is something that a robotic
teacher
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 simply cannot provide.
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this
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 makes it clear why the
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 that
technology
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 will never completely replace the
teacher
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 in the
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 could
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 be plausible. In summary,
both
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 sides of the
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 regarding the possibility of a technologically driven
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 have strong support.
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 after analyzing
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it is clear that
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 the idea of having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported. As
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, it is predicted that the negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of
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 computers will never replace teachers.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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