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Today, many people do not realise how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

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These Days,
majority
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the majority
 of individuals are not aware of the importance of
natural
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the natural world
world
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.
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.
 The main cause is technology, pollution, and global warming. Fortunately, some ways can be used to enlighten people the benefits of
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environment
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environmentally
environmental
Such
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 as strategies used to preserve nature, particularly, tree planting and proper waste disposal.
Firstly
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, technology is spreading widely globally
in
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addition companies
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addition, companies
 utilize food
preservativation
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.
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.
This
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 is because, currently the rates of environmental pollution
is
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are
 high as well as deforestation.
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 results in global warming
.
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.
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, people can purchase processed food from the supermarket thereby making the natural
world
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 less important.
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, many supermarkets sell baked beans and frozen
vegetables which
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vegetables, which
 are easily accessible by the community.
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 of
this
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, individuals do not notice the importance of the natural
world
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.
some
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Some
 strategies can be used to
train public the
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train the public
 importance of
environment
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. Given that, it will assist to create awareness of the side effects of
polluted
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a polluted environment
environment
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, proper waste disposal, and ways to preserve nature.
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,
introduction
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the introduction
 of mass campaigns of tree planting and litter
collection
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collected
 by the government or non- governmental institutions.
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, enlightening the community about
detrimental impact
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the detrimental impact
 caused by negligence to
takecare
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take care
 of the natural
world
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. To conclude, people do not take care of the
environment
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 because of inadequate knowledge. Given that, technology is spreading universally and companies use chemical preservatives to prevent food decay due to low farm produce caused by global warming.
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, holding mass campaigns on tree planting and litter collection, as well as educating the public on proper waste disposal together with
pre caution
a precautionary measure warding off impending danger or damage or injury etc.
precaution
 taken to prevent pollution is vital.
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