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In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should school do to prepare students for the world of work?

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Every school teaches academic knowledge to their students. Among all, the students from age 11 to 13 are different from others. Students within the ages are crucial because, at
this
 stage they prepare themselves for a better future.
Besides
, European countries children within
this
 age learn practical skills from institutions.
However
, children from other side of the globe teaches general academic education. In my point of view every educational institution around the world should follow the European schools. Nowadays, practical skills are essential for better careers. Practical skills added value to a candidate in the working arena. It increases the chance of a candidate to get lucrative job. Particularly, European candidates are more ahead than the rest of the participants. Behind the reason is, as they were taught constructive proficiency in the beginning of their lives from an academic institution, so, they are more skilled than the rest. Even though, Students who receive
such
 constructive techniques from educational centre, they receive added value in various ways.
Such
 learner help themselves to cope-up with the competitive business arena.
Furthermore
, functional tutorials increase their knowledge and it will make them exceptional from others.
Lastly
, these practical skills
makes
Suggestion
make
 children’s more focus in their future life.
For example
, It makes mature enough the learners that what will they do in their future life. On the other side, general education is
also
 necessary, if anyone does not know the basic knowledge they how he/she could compete in the competitive world. It is undoubtedly true that, basic tuitions are essential, but
also
 functional tutorials together make students stronger. In conclusion, it can be suggested that every school around the universe should include practical education as a mandatory course in their curriculum.
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