Some people think it's better women can join army navy and Air forces. Give advantages and disadvantages of this

Nowadays, we can see most of women are educated than men and
also
both women are like to do an adventures works. For an example, there are so many boys doing culinary arts and most of the girls try to new things like driving highway busses. So joining the military is
also
like that. The
first
advantage of
this
is, we can grow the humanity to the world, by joining them to military forces. Most people in the world
,
Accept space
,
think that military persons are Tuff than normal persons. So we can break
this
by joining n women
for
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in
of
the military and
also
, we can give a stimulation for boys to join the military forces
from
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for
this
. When the soldiers are conducting medical camps, we can involve women for doing it clearly and correctly. So the people who visiting the camp
aren't face
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aren't facing
aren't faced
haven't faced
don't face
any difficulties
because, women
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, because women
can easily contact with people. By joining women
to
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in
of
the military
forces we
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forces, we
can do nice
perrades
any place of complete bliss and delight and peace
paradise
parades
parodies
with these military women. It will be a new experience for all of us. These are the advantages of
join
Suggestion
joining
women for military works. The disadvantages of
this
are women can't bear the Tuff practises which did in the military society.
Also
, if they have to go to a war situation, they can't manage it well as men and
also
its
it is
it's
too difficult to wear heavy uniforms like male soldiers. In according to my view it's better the women can join military forces because,
then
we can grow humanity to the world than now.
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