Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of all ages and cultures together. Do you agree with this?

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Music has
tremondous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
tremendous
capability to bring people
close
Suggestion
closer
. Sometimes we only
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
the
sound but
Accept comma addition
sound, but
not the lyrics because their
rhythum
the basic rhythmic unit in a piece of music
rhythm
rhythms
and voice attracts everyone. So, I totally happy to say that different tribes with different languages attract
with
Suggestion
to
each other by their music. In my country Pakistan, there are too many local voices and
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
are unknown to understand others. But when it
come
Suggestion
comes
to the enjoyment, they will listen any type of
vocels
relating to or designed for or using the singing voice
vocals
voices
vessels
and hear any type of music. They love their own singers and their songs, still they appreciate other voice.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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