Topic: Some say that sports play an important role in society. Others think it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Do you agree or not?

Nowadays more
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Nowadays, more
people tell that
games
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the game
game
is
an
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a
neccesary
absolutely essential
necessary
part
in
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of
the population.
while
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While
the others thought
are playing
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is playing
activity. In
this
essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will agree that sports are
huge help
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a huge help
to make humankind are healthy
,
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,
as well as become energetic
.
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.
And mankind
also
should do an exercise so that they cannot gain more
weigth
the vertical force exerted by a mass as a result of gravity
weight
, especially
the old
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older
the older
people who got easily weak. To commence with sports is the best way
to
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for
the people to become strong and it is many
benefit
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benefits
to the
society
.Many masses
also
the sports they want a habit and they enjoy to play
this
.In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
this
is a game and the other they are
compete
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competing
for the price.
For
example in
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example, in
boxing the player who is famous is Manny
pacquaio
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Pacquaio
,
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,
he
sacrifice
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sacrifices
so hard to become a professional.
This
sports
also
the youngsters
,
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,
help their mind to become a better person.Because they focus of their goal for
this
game.
Moreover
,
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,
if the people are
become
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becoming
busy in the different sports the
society
become
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becomes
happy and open minded. Moving forth, the other people think it is a luxurious stuff, because some mankind
this
sports
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sport
they want to become
hobby
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a hobby
and the they make a group to manipulate
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
to join.
this sport it
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In this sport it
This sport it
is
also
a good influence for the youngsters in
this
new generation.For an instance the basketball, volleyball and swimming
this games
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this game
these games
many adolescents they enhance their skills, And
this
is
most popular
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more popular
for
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in
this
new era.
However
,
this
is
also
bad habit
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a bad habit
if the people in the
society
they
are not know
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do not know
don't know
how to handle
this
sport.While if the other
want
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wants
this games
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this game
these games
they need to become friendly and smart. In Conclusions, the sports are the most crucial role in
this
society
because the
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
poles
Poles
are
become
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becoming
smart
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smarter
and they
are enhance
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are enhancing
are enhanced
have enhanced
their talent.In
this
statement my
opiniom
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
os
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
is
that games are the best and essential part of the individual in their daily life
,
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,
also
to have a healthy lifestyle.
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