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The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world

The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world
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The given table chart illustrates the forested
area
 in millions of
hectres
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hectares
 in six different parts of the world in the
year
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years
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 1990, 200 and 2005.
Overall
, it is clear from the table
the
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majority of
land
 which was covered with
forest
 belongs to Europe
while
 the minority goes towards Oceania. Looking at the table in more detail for Africa and South America, it is evident that the
foreseted
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forested
area
 saw a noticeable decrease over the given years. In 1990, around 749
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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hectors
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hectares
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 of
land
 was covered by
forest
 for
africa
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Africa
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,
this
 figure
slided
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 to 709 in 2000 and it
was
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further
 decreased to 691(000,000 ha) in the
year
 2005. South America followed
the
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 similar trend, for
them
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 the figures went down from 946 (000,000 ha) in 1990 to 882 in the
year
 2005. Two parts of the world namely Asia and Europe saw a sharp increase in forested
land
 over the period shown.
While
 the
forest
area
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former
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the former
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 climbed from 576(000,000 ha) in 1990 to 584 in the
year
 2005,
Europes
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Europe's
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land
of
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forest
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the forest
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 had risen from 989(000,000 ha) in 1990 to 1001 in the
year
 2005. For Oceania , the
forest
coverd
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covered
cover
area
 saw a minute decrease of 1(000,000 ha) each
year
.
Nort
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North
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America
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America's
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 forested
area
 declined from 708(000,000 ha) in 1990 to 705 in the
year2000
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year 2000
,
this
 figure stood the same for the
year
 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, year, land, forest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
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