Some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to some, delinquents
should not be send
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should not be sent
to
prison
, rather than,
education
and
occupation
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occupational
training should be implemented. I highly agree that
education
and job training approaches should be adopted
instead
of
prison
sentences unless for some dangerous criminals.
To begin
with, it is undeniable that
crimes including
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crimes, including
kidnap
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kidnapping
, mug, murder and smuggle are very dangerous for both people and society. Because, these crimes not only diminish citizen’s quality of life, but
also
threaten their safety. So, I think that
prison
should be compulsory for who commit these crimes. By doing
this
, offenders would be afraid
of these
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of, these
severe punishments and are
therefore
less likely to offend again.
Thus
,
prison
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the prison
provides an opportunity for perpetrators to be reformed.
Also
, when dangerous offenders are kept in jail, there is any relationship between them and other people.
This
causes less
crime
in society and brings about safety for the citizens.
However
, in my opinion, many criminals
such
as who commit
crime
unintentionally don’t need to send to
prison
because they are not aware of what they do. A significant percentage of
crime
stems from insufficient
education
so raising awareness of people about crimes can greatly deter individuals from doing illegal actions and causes low
crime
rate. Job training
also
turns criminals into a
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
person and offer them a great opportunity to land jobs and support themselves. In conclusion,
although
I think that
prison
should be used as a means to deter dangerous crimes, in my opinion
education
and job training are more sustainable
crime
-fighting solutions than
prison
for many offenders.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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