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Nowadays people are working from home using computers and telephones. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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These days more and more people are working remotely by means of computers and telephones. Remote workers can benefit from working from anywhere and anytime as well as reduced
costs but
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costs, but
 there are
also
 drawbacks to be considered. On the one hand, thanks to technological advancements and invention of some social networking applications
such
 as
skype
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Skype
, people from all walks of life can earn money anywhere and anytime. By doing
this
, individuals can save time and money, on transportation, as an example. Because it does not require to book a taxi, take a bus or use your private
car to reach to
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car to reach
 your office.
This
, in turn, causes less traffic congestion and polluted
air which
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air, which
 is beneficial for people’s well-being, both physically and mentally. Another positive aspect of telecommuting is the high productivity it brings. At
home
, people can provide and benefit from a
cozy
enjoying or affording comforting warmth and shelter especially in a small space
cosy
 ambiance without any
distractor
one who disparages or belittles the worth of something
detractors
distracting
. In
this
 circumstance, telecommuters can focus more on their task and do it as precise as possible, which results in more productive work.
On the other hand
, one problem of working from
home
 is less connection with colleagues.
This
 may negatively affect people’s communication skill and trigger social isolation which in turn might cause some mental diseases like depression. Another possible issue of telecommuting is that remote workers may fail to separate their work and life.
For instance
, many women hold the view that when their husband is at
home
, he should allocate most of his time to his family. So people working from
home
 may encounter obstacles in their life and family problems
as a result
 of immersing themselves in their assignment in the vicinity of their family. In conclusion, while people can hugely benefit from working in their own
home
, it may
also
 lead to isolation or family issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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