IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 8

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree?

#people #person #culture #practices #customs
It is an irrefutable fact that Travelling in different countries always memorable and unforgettable moments, which makes people’s mind fresh. Some people assert that visit in different countries should be difficult, if you don’t know the culture and traditions, where you want to plan to go. I agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay, I intend to explain my views before reasonable can be drawn. There are several reasons that why we need to understand the rules and regulations of the other nations.
Firstly
, there are lots of people travel in other places, due to some official-work or on summer vacations. But, The problem starts, when we do illegal activities which is common in their own country,
such
 as eating food in public areas, not to allow take the photos and filming the local community. For an example, In Singapore, Folks are not allowed inside the building, if you caught by the building manager or staff
then
 definitely there is huge penalty.
Moreover
, Around the thousands of immigrants move to the other countries
such
 as Canada, Australia, in order to secure a bright future. Most of the students found problems like tradition food, leasing house for rent and community rules. According to the survey conducted by the Canadian Government found ghat 80 percent of the International students work extra hours,
instead
 of working 20 hours as per Canada rule.
In addition
, which causes problems while applying work-permit after study. To put in a nutshell, I pen down and say that it is very important for everyone, when we visit any place to make sure, learn their culture and human rights of the country,
instead
 of put ourself in trouble.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: