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You borrowed something from your friend, later it got damaged. Write letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: • apology about the issue • tell how it got damaged • say you are going to fix this issue.

#friend #apology
Dear Nancy, Hope you’re doing well! Just want to say sorry for what happen to your
camera
!
recently
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Recently
, which I have borrowed from you for my office trip. I understand after you giving clear instructions of using the
camera
, some unfortunate thing happened. I
’ll will brief
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’ll brief
 you exactly what happened. You’re 360 degree angle
camera
 is one of
best cameras
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the best cameras
the better cameras
better cameras
, I have seen recent past. We started taking pictures every day and was showing to my office mates, they were amused with clarity and the resolution of the picture. Later on, one of my colleagues wants to go to a beach, so he asked me to give the
camera
 to take
few
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a few
 snaps with his girlfriend. Unfortunately! I couldn’t insist
of
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on
 giving the
camera
, while taking pictures
in
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on
 the beach he drop it in the water, so after it stopped working properly and pictures were blurred. You need not to worry about
this
, me and my colleague going to buy a similar kind and same brand 360 degree
camera
 as a replacement from our end. I know it may the special product for
you but
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you, but
 my apology for what happened because I wasn’t there to take care of it, still I will take the sole responsibility of the incident and will replace it. Hope you’ll understand the situation. Your friend, Sanjay

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