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Parents of obese children should be punished for making them fat. Do you agree or disagree?

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The parents of children who suffer from obesity should receive punishment for allowing their children to become overweight.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement because obesity can be caused by genetics and children often eat unhealthy food outside of the home. Parents are not to blame because obesity can be caused by genetics. The DNA
that is
 passed from parents to
child
 can trigger a slow metabolism which
resuls
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
results
 in the
child
 burning fewer calories than normal. Despite
givng
the act of giving
giving
given
 the
child
 a balanced diet or opportunities to do exercise, they may still not be able to maintain a healthy weight, despite the best intentions of their mother and father. A recent study found that 70% of all morbidly obese children
also
 have at least one parent who is
also
 seriously overweight and more than half have two. Parents are not present when
childern
a young person of either sex
children
 consume most of their food.
when
Suggestion
When
childern
a young person of either sex
children
 are at school, they eat snacks and have lunch and the adults have no control over their dietary intake during
this
 time. A
child
 could consume the vast majority of their calories during these unsupervised periods, without their mother and father's knowledge or permission and much of
this
 intake could take the form of junk food. A recent study found that primary school students consume an average of 75% of their daily recommended calorific allowance during school hours. In conclusion, parents should not be sanctioned if their sons or daughters are too heavy because they are unable to supervise their diet for most of the day and genes play a role in determining the weight of a human being.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • genetics
  • socio-economic status
  • nutritional education
  • physical activity programs
  • adverse effects
  • mental health issues
  • responsibility sharing
  • implementation
  • privileged families
  • supportive environment
  • lifestyle changes
  • educational campaigns
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