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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the country side

#city #country #side
I am living in a shared
room
 in college hostel.
First
 of all, the
room
 is so small for two
person
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people
persons
 to live. But I tried my best to accommodate in that
room
. Now,
its
it is
it's
 very difficult to live more days in
this
conditions
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condition
. Mainly, my roommate has not good habits. He did not clean the area or his bed and cupboard
also
. His clothes are dancing in the
room
 on chairs and table. These
condition
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conditions
 of his dresses smelled the whole
room
 due to which sometimes struggle to breathe. I managed to stay and suggest him to live properly and stop these bad nature things.
Still he
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Still, he
 did not understand. There is
also
 study
issue
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the issue
issues
. He
listen
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listens
 music most of the time. I
also
 love music but when I want to cover my syllabus and want to study,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 stop these things. He was not getting these things and doing
non sense
a message that seems to convey no meaning
nonsense
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. So,
its
it is
it's
 a request from me to you. Please understand my problem and send me to any single
room
. I want to stay alone. Because I want to concentrate on my degree and if there remain problems, I did not do that properly. Thanks sir.
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