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Everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern world
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 education plays a vital role in the development of a country
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Therefore
 everyone should be allowed to attend University study programs despite of
there
of them or themselves
their
 academic score. I agree with the statement. From analysing the statement
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 Each one of us has
there
of them or themselves
their
 own hidden talent which can'
t
 be found just based on your marks.
To begin
 with
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there are several
reason
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reasons
 which point out that the statement is correct.
Firstly
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in some countries
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 a student's higher studies depends upon the marks he got during his School days.
For instance
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 Steve jobs 'The apple CEO' was a high school drop out
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Thus
, based on
score
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the score
scores
 he isn'
t
fit
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Fit
 to find a company
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however
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However, this
However this
this
 theory was
disapproved
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Disapproved
 by many people who are living a
luxury
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luxurious
 life
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The score earned by a student during his childhood doesn'
t
 decide his
future
.
Therefore
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 government should give more importance in identifying people's individual's talents
instead
 of
acedemic
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Academic
Academies
Acedemic
 based education.
On the other hand
, The role of a government doesn'
t
 end just by
indentifying
recognize as being; establish the identity of someone or something
identifying
a
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an
 individual's
skills
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skill
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Most importantly
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it is the responsibility of the government to nurture their people by providing the training required for the individual's. Which in turn plays a major role in
future
 development of a country. In conclusion
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a country's
future
 depends on their people
similarly
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 a person's
future
 depends upon
his
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His
 skills
Therefore
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to improve his skills education is important
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In the end, everyone should allowed to attend despite his academic level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic ability
  • admission criteria
  • equal opportunities
  • higher education
  • institutional resources
  • merit-based
  • qualification devaluation
  • under-qualification
  • vocational training
  • inclusive education
  • diversity in academia
  • competitive edge
  • global economy
  • academic standards
  • universal access
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