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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural backgrounds living together in the same country makes the country develop faster. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, some people claim that a multicultural
country
 is the key for a
country
 fast development. In my opinion, people from different cultures can contribute to a faster
country
 development. Because, they can not only present a new perspective for a
problem
 but
also
 help in connecting different countries by language.
Firstly
, it is wrong to think that different societies have completely different problems, in fact, in many cases is just a matter of how they deal with a
problem
.
For instance
, whereas some countries deal with the accommodation
problem
 in big cities by building taller buildings, other nations prefer to invest in public transportation that connects neighbour cities.
Moreover
, another example is the health system which can be either public or private.
Hence
, bringing together multiple point of views can offer different solutions.
In addition
, the world is more connected than ever, so people from abroad can help in connecting countries with language.
For example
, people from China living in Britain could allow a local company in doing business in China by helping both sides communication.
Furthermore
, someone who lives in a foreign
country
 can work at the government tourism department and help with translations.
Thus
, someone who knows a different language can offer multiple benefits for a
country
. In conclusion, a
country
 with a plural population can have many benefits regarding not only different
problem
 approaches, but
also
 improvements in connecting with other countries. The mentioned benefits with no doubt can help a
country
 in order to develop faster.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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