Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is certainly true that advancements in technology, saves people

time

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and money, but it

also

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makes people lazy and anti-social.In

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essay, I agree with the notion and I am going to elaborate, my view points with some reasons and supportive examples. There are

myraid

too numerous to be counted

myriad

of drawbacks of

television

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. A common criticism of

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is that T.v.

programmes

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Programmes

are addictive.

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people stay glued on

routine basis

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a routine basis

to them.

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tempatation

something that seduces or has the quality to seduce

temptation

consumes a lot of their

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and

encourges

contribute to the progress or growth of

encourages

encourage

them to keep away from their love ones.

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, a person watching tv series like 'Big Boss' on

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colour

colours

channel

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is much more concerned about upcoming episodes, and he would not like to miss it.Due to

this

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, he will not socialize with people or go for outing with his family.

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to it, job holders

also

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consume their leisure

time

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by sitting in front of

television

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. Rather than spending their weekends with their loved ones, they watch

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sports

matches.

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this

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, sometimes they lose their families and friends. Futhermore, watching

television

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for long hours

make

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makes

masses inactive persons.In simple words, if a person is entertained with one thing at one place, he will not leave that place at any cost. A particular example is that

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a recent study reported that 88% people

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become

lazy due to tv serials, as they do not like to miss

episode

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an episode

episodes

of their favourite serials,

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, they do not work anymore, they just stay at home and watch tv. After pondering over

great deal

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a great deal

of thoughts, I come to the conclusion that,

television

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is dominating people's free

time

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consequently

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they refuse to be connected with

real world

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the real world

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

271 words

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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

People who damage public property, such as buildings or statues should be required to do community service (such as cleaning parks) as a punishment rather than other forms of punishment (such as paying a fine or going to prison). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people work long hour, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?