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It has transformed the way information is shared. What are the problems being faced due to this?Suggest some possible solutions for dealing with these problems.

#information
The
Internet
 has become the most accessible for humans in recent times. It does have some great benefits and at the same time, it does have some disastrous effects on our lives. Here I would discuss both aspects and suggest the solution to overcome
this
 problem.
First
 of all, the basic advantage of having the
internet
 is to bring the love ones much closer than ever before. We may now contact them through various channels,
for example
, Skype, Messengers and other communication facilities available to us. Another good thing is accessing
information
 about the current affairs worldwide
for instance
, national and international relations with each other. Even not just gaining
information
, if you like to expand yourself in terms of business you may figure out everything on the
internet
. Let's say the country according to your business plans where you can accelerate yourself and the consumer market or geographic locations and other important aspects. The
internet
 has made
this
 world smaller than our imagination.
However
,
on the other hand
, there is a greater chance to leak out some confidential or sensitive
information
 on the
internet
,
this
 may cause the whole country putting in a disaster situation.
In addition
 to that, your personal life is being greatly compromised.
For example
, the latest social media and searching engines seeking your permission to publicize your
information
 on the
internet
 and without knowing the consequences of spreading
information
 we allow these search engines to access our personal
information
. As the google map is one of the most beneficial ways to get to the desired destination,
however
,
this
 application seeking our permission to target our location causing compromising your privacy. We are so much indulged with these technologies that it is hard for us now to come out of it.
However
, we can try to reduce
this
 problem to a minimal level by using less social media websites or may do the work manually as much as possible. The
internet
 is very beneficial by all means, but when it comes to conflict the world war will be the result

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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