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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.
The figures below give information
of
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 a
survey
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 result that was conducted on adult education. The first graph illustrates the proofs why young
persons
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 make a decision to educate. The
second
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 diagram describes how humans believe the
cashes
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cash
amounts of cash
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 of youth schooling should be portioned.
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, the interest
to
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 subject and
to gain
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 qualifications are the
tops
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 reasons
of
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for
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 mature teaching
that
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followed by helpful for
current
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 job, to improve prospects of promotion and enjoy learning or studying, and the price of each program should tell
to
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every
students
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student
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, employer and taxpayer of scholar. The
regart
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regard
 to topic prominent the
survey
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 that contributes to 40%.
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, the
second
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 reason that chip in 38% is to reward qualifications,
the
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helpful for
existing
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job
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,
to
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develop prospects of upgrading and enjoy studying put up 22%, 20%, and 20%. The individual
have
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a
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apply
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40% portion of
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survey
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the survey
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 that people think knowing
fees
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the fees
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 of each scholar should be told.
The employer
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Employer
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 and
taxpayer
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taxpayers
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 take part
to
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 35% and 25% of
this
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survey
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words survey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adult education
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Survey results
  • Pie chart
  • Career advancement
  • Personal development
  • Subsidies
  • Cost-sharing
  • Funding models
  • Government grants
  • Private sector investment
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial aid
  • Continuing education
  • Taxpayer contribution
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Professional qualifications
  • Vocational training
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