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More people decide to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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With the progression of the society, many people do their family planning in their thirties rather than twenties which was common a decade ago.
This
 essay will discuss positives and drawbacks of
this
 trend and which outweighs the other. As people have turned extremely ambitious these days, they prefer achieving their goals and indulge into starting a family later.
This
 priority shift not only help them focus and earn huge amount of money to make them self sufficient, but it
also
 helps to financially
support
 the future generation in a better way.
For instance
, financially independent parents are able to provide a better lifestyle for their children than those who are unstable in their careers.
On the contrary
, ageing brings vulnerability of severe health issues in a person's life. By the same token, pregnancy becomes complicated at the later stage, both for a man and a woman. A recent research concluded that, the probability of conceiving in couples is reduced by 23% after they touch their thirties and can
further
 be declined up to 53% over the
age
 of thirty five.
Secondly
, individuals do not remain fit enough to
support
 their children, if the
age
 gap between the parents and
child
 is big.
For example
, if a
child
 is born when a man is forty five, his
child
 would be only twenty and not financially independent at the man's retirement
age
.
Hence
, the family might need extra financial aids to
support
 the children. In conclusion, they are few advantages to starting a family late
such
 as a
child
 can be provided better financial aid to
support
 his life, the disadvantages are more and it outweighs the advantages as the complications in conceiving can increase with a person's
age
 and the generation gap between progenitors and their children is huge which can become a major issue in future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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