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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
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To commence with,
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 talk about historical building, places and many more eminent things,
first
 and foremost reason is that, our heritage is primary cause to save to
next
 generation which lead to enhance their knowledge and they will
also
 give respect to historical buildings so that's way, it is duty of government they expand money for beauty and saving heritage , And another merit is that, because of beauty, majority of people visit there which
consequently
 to improve tourism which assist to get work to native masses so that's way they full their needs On the flip side, Those anchor who say that, Authority must invest huge wages in new places. There are myr
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