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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
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 give respect to historical buildings so that's way, it is duty of government they expand money for beauty and saving heritage , And another merit is that, because of beauty, majority of people visit there which
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