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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Invention
Suggestion
The invention
 of computers is said to be the most crucial part
in
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of
 the
last
 century. It is absolutely true as It had made our
life
 easier and paved the way for many
further
 inventions. Human
life
 had become very
sophosticated
having or appealing to those having worldly knowledge and refinement and savoir-faire
sophisticated
 in the past century because of computers.
people
Suggestion
People
 used to work hard with many difficult tasks and
also
 involved in dirty works like drainage cleaning. But now the entire works are replaced by machines controlled by computers. Banking is a very good example as the modern computer made the money transfer and billing easier
with
Suggestion
to
 just click of the button. It
also
 changed our communication system in a whole new way. We can converse with anyone across the globe
with out
in absence of
without
 moving an inch from our home. And numerous arduous and boring repeated works are automated so humans now have
large amount
Suggestion
a large amount
 of time for other meaningful jobs.
Evolution
Suggestion
The evolution
 of many recent findings
are formed
Suggestion
is formed
 with basis of computers. Robotics, space research, and some other industries are not even possible without computers.
Today many
Accept comma addition
Today, many
 dangerous works
such
 as working in extreme temperatures and amendments in minute gaps are done by robots and these robots can be controlled only via computers. Extraordinary works like travelling to space, moon and other planets in search of
life
, water is made practical in
this
 era. As I said above computer changed the human
beings
Suggestion
being's
life
 dramatically and made the impossibles possible by the invention of computers. I conclude that computers are the best invention ever made in all these
milleinia
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
millions
 of years.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • revolutionizing
  • indispensable
  • accelerating
  • innovations
  • transformative
  • advancements
  • global connectivity
  • sustainability
  • technological dependence
  • counterpoint
  • long-term consequences
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