You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter - remind your employer what the course was about - explain why the course was useful to you in your work - suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to share feedback with you regarding the training course on SaFe Scrum Master (SSM) which I attended starting from 8th April to 12th April 2024. The course was about the roles and responsibilites
of the scrum master profession. Correct your spelling
responsibilities
Also
, it involved few
applications which are used by them on Correct article usage
a few
regular
basis.
The course was taught by a 15 years experienced trainer currently working in Correct article usage
a regular
this
role and I personally found it very useful for growth in my career. Since,
I am working in an Information Technology (IT) industry with minimal technical Remove the comma
apply
experince
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experience
hence
, I have learnt a lot more about agile
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Agile
this
training. This
is definately
going to be useful for me to take a step forward moving into Scrum master roles which require a bit of technical knowledge Correct your spelling
definitely
along with
management experience which I currently gain.
Further
, most of my colleagues are working in completely technical roles which involves
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involve
development
and coding of applications Correct article usage
the development
hence
, it might not be much
useful for them to Rephrase
very
persue
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pursue
this
training. They have more of
backend work Change preposition
apply
for
example, building Add the comma(s)
, for
of
new technologies rather than managing the team and Change preposition
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client side
demand.
Thank you for giving me Add a hyphen
client-side
this
opportunity for my future endeavours.
Yours faithfully,
Khyati UndaviyaSubmitted by avibhadiyadra on
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a more varied range of sentence structures and connectors to demonstrate flexibility in language use.
Task Achievement
A more personalized sign-off could enhance the professional tone of your letter.
Content
You provided detailed feedback about the training, successfully linking its relevance to your current position and potential career growth.
Structure
The structure of the letter, with clear paragraphs for each of the tasks' requirements, made your points easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite