Some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use to what extent do you agree or disagree

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people argue that animal testing on various products is completely ethical because, it gauges the human safety
furthermore it
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furthermore, it
is often considered by many as the only possible solution in order to introduce new and safe products for us to utilize. I completely disagree with
this
statement because, I believe that unreliable
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which means that there are better ways to assure safety of mankind.
firstly
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animal trials, which were very popular in the previous decades
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have now been largely replaced by more effective assessing tools
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that is
to say with technologies like genetic
engineering which
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engineering, which
has more
yeild
be the cause or source of
yield
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researchers are now able to produce a variety of human friendly products without the need of animal Trials.
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instance beacause
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instance, because
instance because
of incorporation and elimination of genetic material in the DNA, better developed medicines are now
avalible
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
which are deemed far safer for human consumption
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even if not previously tested on lab Rats. That's why animal testing has been a thing of
past
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the past
in many important sectors like medicine.
Secondly
, because of a different genetic makeup animals don't behave the same way as human beings and
therefore
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many animal based trials which are often subjected to a false positive results are not reliable and
instead
sometime might prove harmful to mankind.
Likewise most
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Likewise, most
of the experimentation is carried out for the sole purpose of making money rather than human welfare
for
instance many
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instance, many
upscale cosmetic brands have labs that rely on animal testing in order to produce better and
therefore
profitable cosmetic products.
Thus animal
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Thus, animal
testing is less reliable when it comes to the concerns regarding human safety while maintaining its need mostly to make more lucrative product All in all
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all, although
although
still widely practiced
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animal testing is not only inhumane, but
also
purposeless as it does not produce reliable results and sometime may cause harm to mankind. I
therefore
strongly believe that it should no longer be practiced
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