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Band 4

It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
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It is said that G
overnment
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the Government
is spending huge money to ancient building for r
eparing
restore by replacing a part or putting together what is torn or broken
repairing
while some commentators argue that,
this
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 wages must be i
nvest
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invested
investing
t
o
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in
into
modern building in
this
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 n
otion,
a politically organized body of people under a single government
nation
 I a
m incompletly concur
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incompletely concur
am incompletely concur
am incompletely concurring
with given affirmation and discuss my view in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
initially
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 talk about historical building
first
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 and foremost reason is that, our heritage is primary cause to save to
next
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 generation which lead to enhance their knowledge and they will
also
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 give respect to historical buildings so that's way, it is duty of government they expand money for beauty and saving heritage , And another merit is that, because of beauty, majority of people visit there which
consequently
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 to improve tourism which assist to get work to native masses so that's way they full their needs On the flip side, Those anchor who say that, Authority ought to invest lucre in new places. There are s
everals
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
merits of modern areas.
Firstly
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,
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,
if modern building establish in our a
reas it
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areas, it
would have direct in our
nation
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 because everyone wants to visit their our country which helps to famous our
nation
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 in a
nother
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
countries and
also
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 improve bonding each other which would help to firm contact with each other
Moreover
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, because of which
,
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,
it a
ssit
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assists
assist
assets
to improve trade channel and
also
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 get work to native masses.
As a result
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, it would improve aesthetic value of
nation
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In an epilo
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the old building
g
ue,
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sends
both are primary in our
nation
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 because old building send the her
it
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on
age a
nd
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
also
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 tell us value of those place
furthermore
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 in the anothe
r side
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the nation
a nation
nations
 new places is
also
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 crucial role a development of
nation
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