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Nowadays a few people take their family with them to abroad whenever they go for a business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages on them and on their family.

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In today's scenario, people travel to overseas for their job related assignments. Some persons go
with
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to
 his families, when occupied by long projects. While, there are many benefits like
home made
made or produced in the home or by yourself
homemade
food
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, emotional support and comfort level, but it certainly has some drawbacks. Nowadays a few people take their family with them to abroad whenever they go for a business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages
on
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of
to
for
 them and on their family.
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 with, there are various benefits, the most predominant one of them is that, Employees do not need to be worried about home made
food
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 because fresh and healthy
food
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 could be enjoyed with family.
Also
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, avoid junk
food
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, which can
gives
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give
 birth to many diseases
such
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 as, obesity, cancer and joint aches.
Secondly
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, get
opportunity
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the opportunity
 to learn about new cultures and languages.
For example
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, when a person moves to Canada with his family, there
mostly
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most
 residents speak English
language
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 if
kids
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the kids
 of the family will listen and learn that
language
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, which will enhance their employment opportunities in
future
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the future
.
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, in difficult situations, family can support each other, because in
modern era
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the modern era
 a lot of people are suffering from stress and depression when they live alone. If an individual has family in new
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country
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country, then
then
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 members of the family can give support financially as well as emotionally.
On the other hand
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, it is certainly true that there are
few drawbacks
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a few drawbacks
, when
family move
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the family move
a family move
 at new place they have to adjust in
strange environment
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a strange environment
 and it becomes
hart
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
hard
 to find
job especially
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a job, especially
a job especially
, for different
language
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 people, because members need to learn that
language
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 in which
country
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 they want to work.
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, very few Indian people know how to speak
French
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the French language
language
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 if they move to Qubec, Canada. It is very hard to find work for them. To conclude, while there are few negative consequences, yet I think people have more
benefits namely
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benefits, namely
; get experience of
new
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a new country
country
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, culture and
language
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, when they move to
foreign
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a foreign country
foreign countries
country
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 with their families.

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