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Nowadays a few people take their family with them to abroad whenever they go for a business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages on them and on their family.

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In today's scenario, people travel to overseas for their job related assignments. Some persons go
with
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to
 his families, when occupied by long projects. While, there are many benefits like
home made
made or produced in the home or by yourself
homemade
food
, emotional support and comfort level, but it certainly has some drawbacks. Nowadays a few people take their family with them to abroad whenever they go for a business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages
on
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of
to
for
 them and on their family.
To begin
 with, there are various benefits, the most predominant one of them is that, Employees do not need to be worried about home made
food
 because fresh and healthy
food
 could be enjoyed with family.
Also
, avoid junk
food
, which can
gives
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give
 birth to many diseases
such
 as, obesity, cancer and joint aches.
Secondly
, get
opportunity
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the opportunity
 to learn about new cultures and languages.
For example
, when a person moves to Canada with his family, there
mostly
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most
 residents speak English
language
 if
kids
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the kids
 of the family will listen and learn that
language
, which will enhance their employment opportunities in
future
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the future
.
Moreover
, in difficult situations, family can support each other, because in
modern era
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the modern era
 a lot of people are suffering from stress and depression when they live alone. If an individual has family in new
country
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country, then
then
 members of the family can give support financially as well as emotionally.
On the other hand
, it is certainly true that there are
few drawbacks
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a few drawbacks
, when
family move
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the family move
a family move
 at new place they have to adjust in
strange environment
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a strange environment
 and it becomes
hart
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
hard
 to find
job especially
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a job, especially
a job especially
, for different
language
 people, because members need to learn that
language
 in which
country
 they want to work.
For example
, very few Indian people know how to speak
French
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the French language
language
 if they move to Qubec, Canada. It is very hard to find work for them. To conclude, while there are few negative consequences, yet I think people have more
benefits namely
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benefits, namely
; get experience of
new
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a new country
country
, culture and
language
, when they move to
foreign
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a foreign country
foreign countries
country
 with their families.

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