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the chats below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

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The charts illustrate the median proportion in
percentage
 of ordinary meals in three categories of nutrients, which are harmful if ingested in great amount. Overall, there is a comparison of three elements, which are sodium, saturated fats and added sugar in four different periods of eating time. The most striking feature is the high
percentage
 of these nutrients eaten during the dinner period, which results almost the highest
percentage
 in each section. In fact, Sodium and Saturated fats result by far the highest volume, 43% and 37% respectively. While Added Sugar represents only 23%.
Although
 Added sugar is the lowest nutrients eaten during dinner, it is undoubtedly the most ingested during snacks, with a
percentage
 of 42%, whereas Sodium constitutes only 14% and Saturated fat 21%.
In contrast
, all of them have almost the same value during Breakfast, with a volume approximately of 14 16%.
Moreover
,
this
 equality proportion results almost the same during the Lunch time. The average of Sodium is 29%, just over a quarter of its total that results the highest in
this
 eating time, whilst 26% and 19% of Saturated fats and Added sugar respectively.
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