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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some folks believe that some stringent rules about rackets should be publicized to prevent
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 pollution, while others think that they have the right to make any sound they want. From my perspective, I agree that
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 should be put under control. In some cases,
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 should be allowed to make for people’s justifiable needs.
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, at some public events
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 as football matches or festivals, cheering and singing
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 essential things, we cannot ban
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 because these are the occasions for people to relax and have fun.
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, these days, there are various types of equipment that could block
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 as soundproofing doors, windows and foam panels. These give people the freedom to roister without disturbing others.
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, they are not always applied everywhere,
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, uproar could still be made and annoy surrounding people. These following reasons explain why I think there should be strict controls about
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.
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 of all, rumpuses affect other people’s health and repose considerably. By
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 I mean, they can cause hearing loss or sleep disturbances if the
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 is too loud and long-lasting.
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, it is so impolite and ill-mannered to influence people’s work. Take my English class as an example. Our class’s location is near a house which always sings karaoke loudly in our studying time.
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, some of the students are distracted, they cannot pay full attention to the lessons and especially, the listening sections. In conclusion, from my point of view,
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 people have the right to make
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, it should be limited to avoid affecting others’ health and peacefulness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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