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Many people believe that modern inventions have brought more problems than the benefits. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons to your answer, and required examples

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World
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The world
 is going on a fast forward pace with number of latest discoveries. Some argue it as a bad sign, while others overwhelming how easy their lives becoming with
latest trends
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the latest trends
. I stick to the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 statement as I believe recent innovations made our lives
more simple
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simpler
 and fruitful. In olden days people not having access to internet and Mobile phones used to spend
lot
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a lot
lots
 of
time
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 and money
in
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by
 sharing the information with others
.
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.
 With recent advancements in technology we can send an email in
fraction
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a fraction
 of seconds at no cost. Now a
days
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day
 we can get information regarding
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
 in google with
wide range
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a wide range
 of resources available online. Interacting over phone used to be an expensive affair a decade ago. But now you can talk to the person by seeing each other with
latest advancements
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the latest advancements
 like
skype
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Skype
 call
,
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,
WhatsApp video call at very minimal charges. In
this
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 competitive
world both
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world, both
 husband and wife are doing full
time
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 jobs where they hardly get
time
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 to do
house hold
a social unit living together
household
 chores. New inventions like washing machine
,
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,
dish washer
,
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,
mixer makes their job much easier and quick. With the expansion of digital marketing
u
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
you you
 can order almost anything
online from
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online, from
 clothes
,
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,
shoes
,
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,
different accessories and even groceries and vegetable are
also
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 delivered at your doorstep.
For
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instance being
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instance, being
 a full
time
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 working parents with two children, we always feel technology is a saviour. Can order weekly groceries from
Amazon which
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Amazon, which
 saves
time
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 in having a trip to
super market
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the supermarket
supermarket
a supermarket
. On
contrary
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the contrary
, as the coin having other side, there are some negative effects
also
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 with modern inventions. People becoming more dependent which reducing their physical activity, that leading to the hike of obesity rate. With easier access to internet kids are going off the track. To recapitulate, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. As mentioned earlier about the
drawbacks making
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drawbacks, making
using
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use
 of anything in limitations always remains beneficial.

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