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The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ate local produced food. What extent do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Although
food
 travels thousands of miles to
consumer
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the consumer
 from the farm while few people believed that eating
local
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locally
 produced
food
 is beneficial to
environment
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the environment
 and
economy
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the economy
. There are many advantages over the disadvantages of having
local
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locally
 produced
food
.
Firstly
, there are many eatables which can be grown in specific conditions,
for example
: Tea leaves, which are largely produced in India and China. In
this
 case the
food
 item
need
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needs
 to be travelled some miles to
consumer
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consumers
the consumer
.
Accept space
.
On the other
hand we
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hand, we
 have some
food
 which can be produced from most of the farms even at
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 climate conditions like
Tomatos
mildly acid red or yellow pulpy fruit eaten as a vegetable
tomatoes
tomato
. Here if we
have importing
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are importing
were importing
food
 from distinct
farms
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
forms
 which are far from the location even with the availability of local produced
food
 which
dimnishes
decrease in size, extent, or range
diminishes
 the value of the
local
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locally
 produced
food
 and equally damages the state GDP rate, which will have
huge impact
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a huge impact
 on the local
governence
the persons (or committees or departments etc.) who make up a body for the purpose of administering something
governance
.
Secondly
, If people are consuming
local
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locally
 produced
food
 which helps reducing the travel of huge trucks which in order saves the natural resources and air pollution emitted by trucks. But there are some quite disadvantages there may be huge possibility people
dont
do not
don't
 have sufficient nutrients in locally produced
food
.
Ther
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There
 may be very few eatables which can be grown locally. In the conclusion, Even there are many advantages
to
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of
 environment and economy by the locally produced
food
. There are few deficits to people's health. So, people should consume the
food
 which is produced locally by avoiding the
food
 which needs to be travelled thousand of miles to consume.

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