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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by government. others believe those who financed the of a building should be free to design it as they fit. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Modernisation has seen a lot of improvements in the way the buildings are designed. A Considerable amount of population believes that
government
 should control the design parameters of the newly constructed buildings in major cities while some believe it should be left to the people who finance it.
This
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss why
law
Suggestion
the law
 should control the designing aspects of new buildings in developed cities, but why still leaving the
authority
 to the financier's is more beneficial. People are now-a-days
relaying
have confidence or faith in
relying
 on
government
 to take
decision
Suggestion
a decision
decisions
 on newly constructed buildings in developed cities. The reason behind their thought process is because they feel that legal
authority
 keeps their citizens as
first
 before taking any decision while private
authority
 people think about their own benefits.
For instance
, recently constructed shopping mall in Chennai by the
government
 gives a lot more parking facility than other shopping malls which aren't controlled by law. As
government
first
 priority is its people and
this
 character makes people to trust more on
leagal
established by or founded upon law or official or accepted rules
legal
 authorities than private financier's.
Although
 some believe
government
 should have a grip
in
Suggestion
on
 the design of new buildings, but
their
in or at that place
there
are
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is
 still some amount of
population
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the population
 who believe setting it free to
financiers
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the financiers
 is more beneficial. Financiers think more about innovation and development than being constrained to legal regulations.
For example
, the GMR airport designed by its own financiers has
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of innovation and technology compared to Rajiv airport which is controlled by the
government
. New innovations and development can be seen if the buildings are constructed and designed by its own financier's. Since modernisation has already laid its footprints,
its
it is
it's
 really important to improve constantly in designing new buildings.
This
eassay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
assay
 discussed why design of new buildings should be controlled by
government but
Accept comma addition
government, but
 why leaving it free to the financiers is more profitable. In my opinion its better to leave the
authority
 to financiers as the world wants more innovation and development especially in big cities.
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