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Stress related illness are becoming increasingly common? What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#stress #illness
It may indeed be true to say that illnesses related to
stress
 are becoming increasingly common.
This
essay
 will discuss the main causes of
stress
-related sicknesses including reducing
work
life
balance
 as well as finances.
This
essay
 will
also
 suggest solutions to these proble
ms including limit
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problems, including
ed time at
work
 and managing finances through financial planning. People are working additional hours and are unable to find
work
life
balance
 as well as having difficulties with their finances. In order to gain recognition in an organization, people are spending more hours working ending up sparing less time for themselves, friends and family.
For example
, according to a research 65% of people who spends 8 hours or more working in office premises are prone to
stress
 related illness like headaches, panic attacks or insomnia.
This
 is expected to result in more mental and physical pressure as they have to
work
 overtime and hard which can be more demanding. Having a good
work
life
balance
 and financial planning can both help in mitigating
stress
 related illnesses. To maintain the
balance
 they are required to restrict themselves to partic
ular number of ho
Suggestion
a particular number
urs daily in which they can finish up their daily important
work
.
Furthermore
, having a financial planning beforehand can
also
 help them to reduce burden on their mind and health.
For example
, if they do not follow a routine they will end up affecting their health and might lead to other long term problems.
Therefore
, in order to maintain a
work
life
balance
 and finances one must stick to a strict routine and should focus on financial management. In conclusion, now a days people are becoming more prone to
stress
 related illnesses. In
this
essay
, we discussed how
stress
 is often caused by not maintaining a proper
work
life
balance
 and not managing their finances.
This
essay
also
 suggested that the solution to above
mentioned problems are t
Suggestion
the above mentioned problems
wofold: to restrict your working hours and plan your finances or expenses beforehand.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stress-related illnesses
  • rapid pace
  • pressure
  • balance
  • omnipresent
  • information overload
  • disconnect
  • economic uncertainties
  • job insecurity
  • financial stress
  • environmental factors
  • chronic stress
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • mental health
  • support programs
  • physical activity
  • healthy eating habits
  • awareness
  • accessibility
  • counseling
  • stress management
  • community environment
  • reconnect with nature
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