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Some high school required all student to wear school; other high school permit students to decide what to wear to school.

Are
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 uniforms important? While some colleges, especially the ones in western countries, allow their students to determine what they wear to
school
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, schools here do not permit
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 and only wants their student to wear a specific
uniform
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. In my view, I completely agree with the latter assertion. For those who leave the decision of what to wear to
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 for students, the claim is that
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 attitude does not affect the optimum goal of schooling-learning practical and theoretical principles of life. In supporting
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 point, it is said that once students in high schools are properly taught, the need to look at what is being worn becomes inconsequential. But, when they are allowed to loaf around rather than concentrate on
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 works,
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 things like fashion becomes a topic of consideration.
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, in my opinion, which is the same as the belief in
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 part of the world,
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uniform
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 is important to distinguish and create uniformity for colleges.
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, students of the numerous schools around my area can easily be differentiated, especially in moments of emergencies
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 as a large mass casualty.
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, it is
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 believed that wearing
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uniform
Suggestion
uniforms
 help remove any emphasis on fashion and makes education the focus. In
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 way, anxiety associated with fashion and the number of clothes a student put on per week is eliminated from their psychology. In conclusion, while some do not see the need for
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uniform
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 in high schools because they believe it does not have a significant effect if the students are well taught, others think that a sense of identity is important and I share
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 view too

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