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Some people think that certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind the bars. To what extent do you agree?

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there is a certain amount of people who think that some prisoners must do an unpaid community work, not being put behind the bars.At some point, I agree and disagree with
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 statement. Apparently, some people are being imprisoned, obviously, because they committed some specific crime.All of them have to be punished, but how exactly? I think, it depends.For public safety, the government or people should understand that the judge cannot just let the
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someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
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 go and do community work no matter what he did. So people must realize, that it is made for their comfortable and safe life.
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, the punishments are different for each country, or sometimes even a city.
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, in Ukraine for traffic violation people might get into a prison, while in Germany they just have to pay a certain fine. As we know, it depends on the government and in my opinion, taking the
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 example, in case of traffic violation maximal punishment that people can get is community work, and in case of murder, violation, insult, etc.
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 punishment should be at least from 2 to 3 years of being behind the bars. Summarizing all of the information, penalization for lawbreakers depends on so many circumstances: motives, types of crime, the judge, laws and the government.So I cannot undoubtedly agree or disagree due to a huge range of factors that influence on
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