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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is clear that the invention of the Internet has led dramatic changes in the way people communicate as well as searching for
information
. While I agree that the Internet is a useful
communication
 tool, I would contend that it is not a reliable source of
information
.
Firstly
, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate. With the aid of many
communication
 platforms available on the Internet
such
 as Skype, Telegram and Facebook Messenger, people can make a call or text a message instantly regardless of distance for business purposes or contact with their friends.
For example
, many companies in the US are integrating online interview through video call as a part of their recruitment process.
This
 is a cost effective method as it reduces the cost of travelling between the cites of applicants, which large companies often pay for their candidates as reimbursement of travel expenses. These useful tools of
communication
 have facilitated our contact in an active way.
However
, the
information
 on the Internet can sometimes be unreliable. Whereas in the past, we mostly read the articles in establishing newspapers, nowadays, anyone can publish
information
 on a blog or forum without having it verified. Take fake news about Corona Virus in Vietnam as an example, as
this
 epidemic broke out, many people in Vietnam started leaking news about the number of people infected are increasing remarkably and the government was unable to control
this
 disease, in fact
this
 number was only 5 at that time. If those who read
such
 falsehoods accept them as truths, they might spread
this
information
further
 on social media, in turn creating significant public confusion about current events. To sum up,
although
 I believe that the significant advantage of the Internet in terms of
communication
 is undeniable, it is important to consider the disadvantage of the Internet age has created is the proliferation of false
information
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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