In some countries the widespread use of internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of travelling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In
this
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day and age, people rely increasingly more on the internet, especially for students and employees who prefer to study or work at
home
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rather than go to school or workplace. In my opinion, the weaknesses of working or studying remotely outbalance the strengths. On the one hand, it is apparent that our concentration will decrease since there are various temptations at
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. Take students as an example, their self-control abilities are not mature enough which might lead to their inattention on textbooks. Except for students, employees are
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more likely to be lazy without the surveillance of their leader or supervisor, which will bring about lower
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and less efficiency compared to working at the office.
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, owing to the dependency on the internet and the computer, the requirement of hardware is increasing dramatically and people need to spend more money on them, which means their hardware,
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as cable or computer, might not be working and sometimes it will definitely impact the efficiency. Admittedly, there is no denying that working or studying remotely does bring about various advantages.
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of all, it is obvious that people can avoid extreme weather,
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as storm and heavy snow, which is very convenient for people who live far.
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, if epidemics prevail in cities,
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as Corona Virus, it is imperative for local residents to stay at
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and isolate themselves to avoid contacting the virus.
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, I think staying at
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is merely to keep away from certain extreme situations, it will not increase the working or studying performance directly. To sum up, I think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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