Some countries show criminal trials publicly on the Tv. Is there more advantages or disadvantages to this?

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The judge proceeding very serious process in every society
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Other states show criminal trials on the public television
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In my opinion that
tele casting
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
telecasting
court proceeding has
more drawback
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more drawbacks
a more drawback
than the benefits.
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the public can learn a lot about the court proceeding
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In other
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words people
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words, people
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
have more awareness which can be helpful
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Secondly wathching
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Secondly, watching
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the criminal on trial can serve as a warning to other crime
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as
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As
a
result it
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result, it
can help to reduce the crime rate
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For
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example in
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my country government reported
15 % decline
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a 15 % decline
in the
wrong doing
departure from what is ethically acceptable
wrongdoing
among youth in 2018 due to the televising of law courts
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In
conclusion despite
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conclusion, despite
the benefits the drawback of an open television trial could be disastrous due to the public and media pressure
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Many countries
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have seen
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someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
trials
publicy
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
on the public television.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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