Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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A large number of youth

decide

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decides

to leave their hometown from rural area to urban area in the search of better job opportunities and quality of education which, is provided in metro cities. I personally believe that pros of migration outweigh its cons. There are two primary reason for migrating.

Firstly

, younger generation

want

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wants

to have a good resource and proper quality of

life

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life, such

such

Accept space

proper health care facilities, colleges for education so that they are able to compete with developing generation and have better qualified jobs which, will give them self

satfisfaction

the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation

satisfaction

abilityto

Suggestion

ability to

grown

Suggestion

grow

, and support their families in

village

Suggestion

the village

villages

a village

For

example in

Accept comma addition

example, in

the recent

years it

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years, it

has been seen that the quality of life of people living in

small village

Suggestion

a small village

has increased due to moving to

larrge

above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent

large

larger

cities.

Althought

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Although

their

in or at that place

there

is a positive growth

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Some factors

effect

the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion

affect

such

as,

overpopulation which

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overpopulation, which

leds

take somebody somewhere

leads

to congestion on roads

as a result

employes

a worker who is hired to perform a job

employees

employers

are not able to reach

workplace

Suggestion

the workplace

on time and feel stressed out during due to long

traveling hours

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hours travelling

travelling hours

Moreover

, due to

large number

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a large number

the large number

of people coming from

diffrent

unlike in nature or quality or form or degree

different

area work together

their

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There

Their

is a lot of

competation

a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers

competition

computation

to sustain in companies For an instant, Wipro

oranization

a group of people who work together

organization

wants their

employes

a worker who is hired to perform a job

employees

employers

devlop

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

skills which, makes them

diffrent

unlike in nature or quality or form or degree

different

from others.

In addition

, a lot of work can be done by technology

such

as machines and computers which eliminates the work of humans. In conclusion

Accept space

there are lots of merits of moving from one place to another for personal

devlepmont

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

and job growth to provide

source

Suggestion

a source

of income.

Although

their

in or at that place

there

are disadvantages

such

as traffic and

competation

a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers

competition

. I believe advantage

outweigh

Suggestion

is outweighed

its

disadvantes

the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position

disadvantages

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Topic Vocabulary:

Migration
Urbanization
Educational institutions
Job prospects
Wages
Economic growth
Cultural exchange
Overpopulation
Cost of living
Rural depopulation
Social isolation
Traditional values
Personal growth
Recreational activities

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Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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The Internet has provided great benefits, but at the same time, it has also created new problems and inequalities. it possible to control some of these problems?

Some people think most crime is the result of circumstances. Otthers believes that most crime is cused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

Some people think it is more important for the government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?